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who breaks their back, and lines their cage
with glass to hold their power? Like a quiet
finch, tar-covered and hunched over
its child, murmuring a gentle salve.

        we wrench as a reed in the flow of
        a mighty wind, that crushes our chests
        and snaps our legs. We hold our liquid hearts
        in the fleshy sieves of our cupped hands.

Mercury slides
down the plateau of the cheek
I burn, I sizzle.

        I am only coal, within a great fireplace.
        Black and ordinary, but I can yet
        spit from the fire, heatedly
        like an angry snake.

I may terrify. Let my rough edges split
the yolks of rotten eggs,
As I come to the shimmering surface.

Through quagmire, the muck,
my vermillion sludge --
disregard it, my dear
bubbling up, without relent.
©2007-2009 ~failing-at-flight
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Author's Comments

Edit: Thank you very much, `PoeticWar, for the feature. :)

Also, some of my replies to comments are seriously lacking in substance and make me look kind of stupid...I was very excited to have had a DD, so I commented back to everyone as quickly as possible. Sorry about that.

EDIT: Revamped with help from =salshep



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© Chris Boehm, 2007

You may not use this without permission in any fashion.

Daily Deviation

Given 2007-04-26

Coal by ~failing-at-flight takes coal as an object on which to centre its expression. Some potent imagery and diction. (Featured by `PoeticWar)

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:iconchromophobic:
Wow. . .this is the only literature I've ever faved. It's amazing. Congrats on the DD well deserved.

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Evolution rocks!!

Atheist FTW! :D
:iconstoveoven:
I really enjoyed this. I might just watch you.
Applause.

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sure why not..
:iconflamingdragon:
First faved literature as of yet, but more to come hopefully. A very nice piece indeed.
:iconskitsofrenika:
Gorgeously written and very compelling :3

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A man of words and not of deeds is like a garden full of weeds.
♥ ♦ ♠ ♣
:iconrogue03:
Wonderful. :D Lovely imagery.

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I had a snazzy quote thought up, but I forgot what it was.
:icondventsaint:
Beautiful and hard hitting.

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God isn't the sun, because he would be absent at night, he's an eternal flashlight ;)
:iconshinji-complex:
I love you.

That was incredible.

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Two-headed boy, she is all you could need
She will feed you tomatos and radio wires
And retire to sheets safe and clean
But don't hate her when she gets up to leave
:iconmuse21:
Curious, the ideas strike home it the desperate style you write. Of course the D.D. is deserved. You wouldn't have gotten it if it wasn't.

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“Writing is like prostitution. First you do it for love, and then for a few close friends, and finally for money.”
:iconmagicaljoey:
Stunningly written. most enjoyed as a read. very very good work :)
:icondreamerfin:
somewhat intoxiating lol :) great piece of writing.

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"If you want to have no time, just do nothing." Anton Chekhov

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